Friday, 20 May 2016


The Terror
On a dark stormy night I woke up wandering around the house. I went to my parents room. When I walked in I saw blood everywhere my dad’s dead body on the bed but my mum is not there.

I ran outside to see my brothers sleeping I picked them up and ran to call the police but when I got to the phone I heard someone upstairs. I quickly ran outside with my brothers and ran to the park.

When we got to the park we slept behind the bush but I kept watched.The next day we were walking to my Grandparents house when a slow car was passing by It was my mum.She ran out and hugged us I thought that was the end.

Then behind us a man with a gun was walking towards us my mum screamed GET IN THE CAR! I put my brother’s in and got in the car and my mum drove off. He followed us until we got to the police station where my uncle worked. He saw us and asked us if we were ok but we weren’t.

We were at my uncle and aunt's house watching spongebob when a weird man was banging the door and saying open up It was the killer. We ran outside the back door. When we were outside we saw my uncle's dead body stabbed a few times we ran out in the car and off we went.

We parked and slept at the beach. When it struck midnight the man came back I tried to wake up my mum but she got shot and my brothers to I got stabbed in the in the stomach but I was lucky lived.

I learned how to write a narrative that has a problem and a solution.

1 comment:

  1. I like how you used your imagination and how you thought about your writing. I hope you keep up the good work.